Many people, especially young children, watch too much television. Some experts think that this can be dangerous, and that the time would be better spent doing other thing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of watching television?
Television
brings relaxation and enjoyment but if it
excessive it can be harmful to people in the long run. Add a verb
it is
it was
This
essay will discuss both advantages
and disadvantages of watching Correct article usage
the advantages
television
.
There are few
benefits of Correct article usage
a few
television
. It offers wide
range of information like Add an article
a wide
news
, educational programs and documentaries in a cheaper way. For example
, people who watch daily news
help them stay informed about current events and latest
Correct article usage
the latest
trend
. Acquiring learnings from Fix the agreement mistake
trends
variety
of educational Add an article
a variety
program
Change the noun form
programs
such
as Correct article usage
the discovery
discovery channel
, Correct your spelling
Discovery Channel
national geographic channel
, Correct your spelling
National Geographic Channel
history channel
and the like will create awareness of the environment and appreciate different cultures and past events. Correct your spelling
History Channel
Television
is much
Correct article usage
a much
affordable
form of entertainment than going to Correct quantifier usage
more affordable
cinema
or amusement Correct article usage
the cinema
park
. Various programs of sports, music, movies, Fix the agreement mistake
parks
reality
Correct word choice
and reality
tv
shows bring happiness and joy to the viewer. There is no need to be expensive to find pleasure.
Correct your spelling
TV
On the other hand
, there are also
drawbacks of too much television
viewing. These common health issues arise from constant watching of television
are
vision Unnecessary verb
apply
problem
, irregular sleeping Fix the agreement mistake
problems
pattern
and obesity. Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
For instance
, too much staring on
the screen or sitting near to Change preposition
at
television
can cause eyestrain. Children who watch television
past bedtime can develop irregular sleeping pattern
even Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
in
adults who Change preposition
apply
are so focus
on Change the verb form
are so focused
are so focusing
the
reality Correct article usage
apply
tv
shows, dramas, or Correct your spelling
TV
news
tend to become unaware of time passing. Besides
, this
can also
lead to sedentary
lifestyle. Spending more on watching Add an article
a sedentary
television
would create less time for physical activity such
as running, playing basketball, or biking thus
result
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resulting
to
obesity . Change preposition
in
Inactive
social life is Correct article usage
An inactive
also
the outcome of watching too much television
although
they can watch with others but
it is limited to family Remove the conjunction
apply
member
or relatives. Fix the agreement mistake
members
In addition
, negative
influence Correct article usage
the negative
from
Change preposition
of
commercial
will affect the Fix the agreement mistake
commercials
viewers
decision Change to a genitive case
viewer's
viewers'
of choosing
products. Sometimes, people Change preposition
to choose
wont
even notice they are slowly being corrupted Add an apostrophe
won't
from
the Change preposition
by
advertisement
they see because of wrong information. Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
Also
, violence and foul language can be seen and heard on television
shows which would haveCorrect article usage
a
youngster
.
In summary, Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
television
is actually great
source of information and entertainment. It has either Add an article
a great
good
or bad impact Correct article usage
a good
to
Change preposition
on
everyones
day to day life from daily Correct your spelling
everyone
news
, commercials, and tv
shows.Correct your spelling
TV
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Introduction and Conclusion
Ensure that your essay begins with a clear introduction that outlines your position on the topic and ends with a concise conclusion that summarizes your main points. Your introduction successfully sets the stage, but your conclusion could more explicitly restate your stance and the key advantages and disadvantages discussed.
Paragraph Structure
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each focused on a particular idea or argument. You have successfully divided your essay into sections discussing the advantages and disadvantages of television watching, but make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and follows a logical progression of ideas.
Supporting Examples
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Task Response
Aim for a balanced treatment of the topic by thoroughly exploring both sides of the issue. You have addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of television watching, but ensure that your exploration of each side is equally detailed and convincing.
Cohesive Devices
Use a range of cohesive devices (e.g., conjunctions, pronouns, synonyms) to link your ideas and paragraphs together more smoothly. While you have made some effort to ensure coherence and cohesion, more varied and sophisticated use of linking words could enhance the readability of your essay and the flow of your arguments.
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