Many people, especially young children, watch too much television. Some experts think that this can be dangerous, and that the time would be better spent doing other thing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of watching television?

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Television

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brings relaxation and enjoyment but if

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excessive it can be harmful to people in the long run.

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advantages

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and disadvantages of watching

television

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. There are

few

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benefits of

television

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. It offers

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range of information like

news

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, educational programs and documentaries in a cheaper way.

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, people who watch daily

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help them stay informed about current events and

latest

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the latest

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trend

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trends

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. Acquiring learnings from

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a variety

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of educational

program

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programs

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such

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the discovery

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discovery channel

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Discovery Channel

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national geographic channel

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National Geographic Channel

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history channel

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and the like will create awareness of the environment and appreciate different cultures and past events.

Television

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much

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affordable

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more affordable

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form of entertainment than going to

cinema

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the cinema

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or amusement

park

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parks

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. Various programs of sports, music, movies,

reality

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and reality

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shows bring happiness and joy to the viewer. There is no need to be expensive to find pleasure.

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, there are

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drawbacks of too much

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viewing. These common health issues arise from constant watching of

television

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are

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vision

problem

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problems

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, irregular sleeping

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patterns

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and obesity.

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, too much staring

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the screen or sitting near to

television

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can cause eyestrain. Children who watch

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past bedtime can develop irregular sleeping

pattern

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patterns

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even

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apply

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adults who

are so focus

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are so focused

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the

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apply

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reality

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shows, dramas, or

news

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tend to become unaware of time passing.

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this

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can

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lead to

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle. Spending more on watching

television

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would create less time for physical activity

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as running, playing basketball, or biking

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result

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resulting

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obesity .

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social life is

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the outcome of watching too much

television

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although

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they can watch with others

but

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it is limited to family

member

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members

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or relatives.

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negative

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the negative

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influence

from

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commercial

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commercials

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will affect the

viewers

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viewer's

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decision

of choosing

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to choose

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products. Sometimes, people

wont

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won't

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even notice they are slowly being corrupted

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the

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Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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364 words

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Your opinion

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