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The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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The diagram illustrates the Revolution of Devices that
work
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 on electricity.
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, the number of
hours
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 Doing
work
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 in Their Homes in one Country from 1920 to 2019.
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, In 2019 Almost no one has A refrigerator,
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 Dramatically rose in ratio by about 55 per cent in 1940 and one more time Significant increase in number by about 90 per cent in 1960.
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, in 2019 everyone owns a Refrigerator. Washing machines did not seem a Major rise at
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 time.In 1920 the ratio of public purchasing machines was about 40 percent and Approximately 75 percent in 2019.
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, Vacuum Cleaner sees
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Significant growth between 1920 to 2019. Just 30 percent of the public had vacuum cleaners in 1920 and in 2019 everyone had a cleaner in their homes. The number of
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Hours
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 spent on housework per week decreased from 1920 to 2019 . Almost 50
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 per week people spent on their
work
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 in home electrical appliances and in 2019 just 10
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 were spent on important
work
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 in homes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • increase
  • decrease
  • limited access
  • introduction
  • tasks
  • efficient
  • rely
  • technological advancements
  • socioeconomic factors
  • availability
  • resulted in
  • leisure time
  • correlation
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