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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pies graph
illustrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
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 the information about
results
Correct article usage
the results
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 of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school
library
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be seen from the graph quality of the non-printed in university
student’s
Fix the agreement mistake
students’librariesis
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library
Use synonyms
 almost very good.
In contrast
Linking Words
,
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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in
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apply
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postgraduate’s
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postgraduate
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Use synonyms
library
Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
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 are not good. In
term
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terms
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 of
range
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the range
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 of books,
about
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apply
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postgraduate
are
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is
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 worse than undergraduate. On the one hand, the proportion of books in
Correct article usage
the undergraduate’s
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undergraduate’s
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undergraduate
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library
Use synonyms
 was commented
same
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the same
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 about quality, 37% for very good, 35% for satisfaction,
28
Correct word choice
and 28
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% for not good.
Likewise
Linking Words
, in
postgraduate’s
Correct article usage
the postgraduate’s
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 opinion
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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50% is not good, figures
of
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for
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 satisfaction had more than that of very good, exactly 28% and 22% respectively.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, undergraduate was very
satisfaction
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satisfied
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about
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with
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 online materials,
just
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and just
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 12%
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 dissatisfied.
While
Linking Words
,
Remove the comma
apply
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 postgraduate students felt not good about online
document
Fix the agreement mistake
documents
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 about 62% and only 34%
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 good.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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