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The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #results #survey #undergraduates #postgraduates #range #books #materials #school #library #information #features #comparisons
The given pies graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the information about
results
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the results
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 of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school
library
.
Overall
, it can be seen from the graph quality of the non-printed in university
student’s
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students’librariesis
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library
 almost very good.
In contrast
,
it
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apply
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in
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apply
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postgraduate’s
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postgraduate
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library
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libraries
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 are not good. In
term
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terms
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 of
range
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the range
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 of books,
about
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apply
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postgraduate
are
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is
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 worse than undergraduate. On the one hand, the proportion of books in
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the undergraduate’s
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undergraduate’s
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undergraduate
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library
 was commented
same
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the same
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 about quality, 37% for very good, 35% for satisfaction,
28
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and 28
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% for not good.
Likewise
, in
postgraduate’s
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the postgraduate’s
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 opinion
are
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apply
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50% is not good, figures
of
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for
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 satisfaction had more than that of very good, exactly 28% and 22% respectively.
On the other hand
, undergraduate was very
satisfaction
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satisfied
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about
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with
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 online materials,
just
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and just
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 12%
was
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were
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 dissatisfied.
While
,
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apply
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 postgraduate students felt not good about online
document
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documents
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 about 62% and only 34%
was
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were
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 good.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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