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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of playing sports and participating in physical exercises.

#sports #exercises
It is
one
 of the most discussed and debated topics: how regular exercise and
sports
activities
 can impact
one
's life.It is an undeniable fact,
across
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 all age groups, exercise or self nourishing can be used as a yardstick to measure an individual's physical and mental health.I am of the opinion that there are more advantages than disadvantages, which I would like to explain in the following paragraphs. It is quite obvious that
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 there are both mentally and physically considerable benefits to engaging in playing or taking part in
sports
 games.
Firstly
, a good routine, which includes regular exercises,diet,proper sleep,yoga, meditation, etc., reflects a person's
overall
wellbeing
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 and can increase
one
's cognitive capabilities.In today's era,individuals tend to suffer from severe diseases like heart attacks, strokes, depression, etc.,
due to
 their sedentary lifestyle. Nowadays, in schools, universities, and institutes, it is mandatory for children and young adults to take part in extracurricular
activities
 that help them build their mental and physical stamina.
For example
,
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MNC's
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 like EY and KPMG,
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 encourage their employees to participate in events like marathons and trekking, which helps them to build their core strengths.
However
, it is evident that excess of anything is bad, which means exercise should be done in a meticulous manner and in the right proportion.
On the other hand
, physical
activities
 carry adversities like health issues and injuries.The main problem is that
while
 playing
sports
 like hockey, cricket,etc., without proper preparation for the
activities
,
one
 might end up injuring oneself.
Moreover
, gymnastics or learning a sport is quite unaffordable for the middle class.
For instance
, in developing countries,
sports
 like tennis are expensive and considered an upper-class game. In conclusion, the merits of taking up
sports
, or physical exercises outweigh the drawbacks, as they exert positive influences on the mental and physical health of the player.
Thus
, everyone should take risks into consideration to reap the benefits of
such
activites
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activities
.
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