Many people around the world use social media every day to keep on touch with other people and get news event. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Social networking sites are
widespread use
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widely used
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as
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tools
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tool
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tools
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for
people
to get in touch with
they're
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their
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relatives and reach news around the world.
This
phenomenon has its benefits which are breaking the geographical barriers between
people
and providing a large amount of news can overshadow the negatives of the fear of missing out. Nowadays, social media is widely
use
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for communication between
people
by message applications. Those platforms require many functions for users to have a
sastifying
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satisfying
experience when chatting with their friends or relatives,
such
as video calls or image chatting.
This
help
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people
to maintain relationships with their relatives from apart.
Moreover
, communication of
people
also
can be revolutionized by the widely spread of social
network
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networks
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. It should be
aslo
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also
considered that networking sites provide a large amount of news
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task response
Make sure to cover the essay topic completely. Your essay didn't fully address the question of whether the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages. Develop both sides of the argument before reaching a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Start with an introductory paragraph that clearly states your argument or stance on the topic. Conclude your essay with a summarizing paragraph that reinforces your main points and provides a clear answer to the essay question.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow between paragraphs by using transition words or phrases. Each paragraph should present a main idea supported by specific examples or reasons.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples and evidence to support your arguments. For a balanced discussion, include specific advantages and disadvantages of social media, using real-life examples or hypothetical situations.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread use
  • revolutionized communication
  • geographical barriers
  • primary source
  • instant access
  • misinformation
  • news bias
  • mental health
  • increased feelings
  • more 'connected'
  • mobilizing public opinion
  • social movements
  • societal issues
  • collective action
  • evolution of social media
  • sophisticated ecosystems
  • e-commerce
  • entertainment
  • educational content
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