The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.
The line graph illustrates the figure of revenues in the three most common products in a particular bakery in 2014.
It can be seen that the amount of sales product in Bread reached in the final month after remaining stable,
while
the revenue of Buns product decreased slightly, as opposed to the increase of Pies.
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To begin
with, the information about sales of Bread was a significant decrease from $80 Linking Words
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to over $40 Use synonyms
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in March before fluctuating dramatically from March to SeptemberUse synonyms
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and reached the highest point of $80 Remove the comma
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in the period of the month. Use synonyms
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the figures for Pies rose moderately from $10 Linking Words
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to approximately $20 Use synonyms
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in October before growing considerably to $40 Use synonyms
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in December.
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In contrast
, the revenues of sales in Buns stood at $40 Linking Words
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in January and rose moderately to respectively $70 Use synonyms
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. The figure of Buns witnessed a plateau with $70 Use synonyms
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between May and August before declining significantly to only $30 Use synonyms
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in December.Use synonyms
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