Some think that governments should support retired people financially while others believe they should take care of themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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people

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say that

governments

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ought to help the aged

people

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financially,

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others think that they are responsible for themselves. I agree with the first point

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the tax contributions they make throughout their lives, so the

governments

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should pay them when they need

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, some

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argue that seniors should take of themselves by using their own

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as the

governments

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cannot offer

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to all their retired persons. The primary reason

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is the increased cost of living, which hikes day by day.

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, the inflation rate increases every day in almost all developing and

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nations. Because of

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, the authorities of

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nations cannot afford

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money

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to those who are retired. The

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of not paying

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is another reason, as most

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try to avoid paying

taxes

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and find ways to lessen it.

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, in many countries, the majority of employees work under the table to avoid their official income. Despite

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, I opine that the

governments

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should help their citizens by paying their bills. The

governments

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should

intoduce

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introduce

a plan through which all retired

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get sufficient amounts of

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in their bank accounts every month. The amount of

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monthly payments should be based on the tax contributions they have made during their entire life. One

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example is

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tax deduction in Canada.

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and the other

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that workers pay the government from their earnings

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are considered towards their pensions.

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, the retired group of

people

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often fall

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sick and face circumstances under which they often fail to secure themselves financially because of the increased inflation.

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, I think that government should look after their citizens by paying them monthly pensions. In conclusion,

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the cost of taking care of the retired group seems not feasible for the government, I think that those who have paid much

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working

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should be given monthly instalments of

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back. Considering the rising

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prices for everything, the aged ones cannot afford to look after themselves.