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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps show the changes which took place at the seaside resort of Templeton over a period of 15 years between 1990 and 2005.
It is clear that
 seaside
resort
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resorts
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 underwent a dramatic transformation over the period, becoming noticeably less green and more built up. The only places that remained the same in Templeton over the period were the school
and
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the hospital and the railway station. The most visible is that all of the trees in
south-west
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the south-west
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 of the city were cut down, with all the individual houses being knocked down and replaced by supermarket and apartment buildings.
Moreover
,
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the airport
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airport
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airports
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built
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are built
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up
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around
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the school
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school
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schools
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 and
hospital
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hospitals
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. The beach of the
see
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sea
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 was cleared to construct a factory.
Next
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The next
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changes
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change
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were
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was
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 the construction of
new
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a new
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 stretch of railway from
north-east
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the north-east
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 of the city directly to
river
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the river
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 running. A ferry was erect at the mouth of the river.
Furthermore
, the trees were cut down and houses were
pull
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pulled
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 down to make
a
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apply
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way for apartment blocks.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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