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The maps shows the changes of Pentland from 1980 to 2007

The maps shows the changes of Pentland from 1980 to 2007
#maps #changes #pentland
The given maps illustrate
reformation
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the reformation
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 of Pentland town in 1980-2007. It can be clearly seen that
town
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the town
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 had
process
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a process
the process
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 in residential, commercial, and
recreacial
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recreational
 aspects after 27 years. In terms of details in 1980, the
sea
 was located in the north of the area
which
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where
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 the main road ended
to
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apply
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that
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apply
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.
Additionally
, a car
park
 was on the
east-side
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east side
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 of the
map
 with an
accessiblity
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accessibility
 to the path. The grassland was spotted under the parking in the southeast.
lastly
, there is an industrial area on the right-hand of the main road.
According to
 the second
map
, the
sea
 changed to the Yacht Marina in the north and the street covered the
harbor
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harbour
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 of the
sea
. There were 3 apartments near near the
sea
, on the
right-hand
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right hand
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.
Next,
many shops were constructed
into
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to
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 the east of the main path
instead
 of the former car
park
.
Moreover
, some residential
dawellings
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dwellings
 were
bulit
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built
 on the
right-corner
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right corner
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 of the
map
. Ultimately, there
are
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is
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also
 a
park
 , swimming pool, and a
multi storey
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multi-storey
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 car
park
into
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to
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 the right of the
map
, which had
repaleced
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replaced
 by the past industrial area.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sea, park, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • urban expansion
  • natural landscape
  • recreational facilities
  • commercial
  • industrial
  • economic growth
  • environmental initiatives
  • waste management
  • public amenities
  • community centers
  • living standards
  • pollution
  • traffic congestion
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