The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The supplied bar chart illustrates how many tourists visited
several
various types of art galleries in six different countries in 2011.
It can be clearly seen thatCorrect word choice
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,
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Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
Museum
in France had the highest number of visitors over the period.Use synonyms
However
,people did not prefer to visit Linking Words
State
Hermitage in Russia Correct article usage
the State
rahter
than other art galleries in 2011.
In 2011,just under 9 Correct your spelling
rather
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millions
of the Correct your spelling
million
populaions
tend to see Louvre Correct your spelling
populations
population
Museum
in France.(Which was the highest rate of visitors over the period).Use synonyms
Linking Words
While
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,
visiting Remove the comma
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Metropolitan
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the Metropolitan
Museum
in the United States of America was as popular as watching Use synonyms
British
Correct article usage
the British
Museum
in the United Kingdom with 6 Use synonyms
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millions
visitors in 2011.
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million
In contrast
,just over 3 Linking Words
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millions
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million
of
people chose to watch the National Change preposition
apply
Museum
of Korea,just ahead of Museo del Prado in Spain with precisely 3 Use synonyms
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millions
in 2011.Change to singular
million
Moreover
,the number of people who prefer to visit Linking Words
State
Hermitage in Russia was roughly under 3 Correct article usage
the State
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millions
in 2011.(Which was the least number of watchers over the whole year).Change to singular
million
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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