Some people prefer to travel in their own country when they have some time off. Others think that it is better to take a trip to a foreign country. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your choice.

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In
this
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modern era, it is important to have a work-life balance. Many people are fond of travelling and they prefer to
travel
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in their own
country
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. On the other side, there are many people who prefer to take a foreign trip. I prefer to
travel
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in my own
country
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and
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essay will provide relevant examples and a lucid conclusion to support my choice
Firstly
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, it is very important to manage the
time
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off and plan something
in
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within
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that given
time
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limit.
Traveling
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in my own
country
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is less
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time consuming
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and I can
travel
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to more places under a specific
time
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limit.
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, it is cheaper to
travel
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in
own
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your own
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country
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as there are many alternate ways to reach the destination as compared to a foreign trip.
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, If I have 1 week of
time
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to
travel
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, it will take me 2
days
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to reach a foreign destination, 2
days
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to
travel
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there and 2
days
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to come back via flight. On the other side, If I
travel
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locally
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I can
travel
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all the given 7
days
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in a budget-friendly way.
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, travelling to a foreign
country
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takes
lot
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a lot
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of effort,
time
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and planning. If I want to plan a foreign trip, I'll have to check the
weather
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of the destination, shop
accordingly
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,
book
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and book
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the tickets in advance and there is always a chance of flight cancellation.
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, If have planned my 15
days
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of
travel
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to a foreign
country
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and after reaching there, what if the
weather
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doesn't suit me? or what if the
weather
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changes my plans? It's much better to
travel
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in our own
country
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to avoid these unplanned situations. In conclusion, I believe there are multiple advantages of enjoying
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apply
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time
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off by travelling in our own
country
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because it is cheaper, timely managed, easy to manage and full of thrill.
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, I don't have to worry about adapting to
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weather
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the weather
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for my local
travel
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.
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Structure
Your essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. To further improve, ensure that each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that announces the main idea.
Content
You provided specific examples to support your points, which is excellent. To enhance, incorporate a wider range of examples, possibly considering different age groups or interests to make your argument more comprehensive.
Language
Your cohesive devices (Firstly, Furthermore, For example) are used effectively to maintain logical flow. Experiment with a broader range of these connectors to demonstrate more sophisticated control.
Critical Analysis
While your task response is strong, introducing a brief counter-argument could provide a more balanced view before concluding with your own perspective. This shows critical thinking and a deeper understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • local cuisine
  • domestic travel
  • cultural immersion
  • cost-effective
  • short-haul travel
  • travel logistics
  • foreign cultures
  • international itinerary
  • global perspective
  • language barrier
  • cross-cultural exchange
  • bucket-list destination
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