Foreign language should be part of curriculum of the school. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, we find no difficulty
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learning from every corner of the
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thanks to the development of the Internet. The advances of the Internet and communication technology as well form a new thinking of the
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: the
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is flat. In
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world
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,
language
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is the most important factor preventing us from living together, communicating and learning cultures of each other. To
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end, I strongly agree that foreign
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should be a part of
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in high
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. Foreign
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is important for
children
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to be educated in diverse cultures and knowledge. With the assistance of the Internet,
children
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nowadays can find high-quality documents to learn themselves. No matter where those documents were published, from
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top-tier
univeristies
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universities
or well-known professors,
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can
themselves
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access these kinds of resources and learn everything they
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interest
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,
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forms a transparent barrier which prevents them from
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knowledge.
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learning languages in high
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is the only way
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such
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,
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them explore the infinite knowledge of humans. We can easily find it
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more convenient if we know English, and we can study from courses or books published by the leading universities of the
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even though we are in Vietnam.
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, learning
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a foreign
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language
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help
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children
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to have chances
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abroad
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or
appying
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apply
to global companies and
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expected
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career. Indeed, there are companies
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dream of many
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studing
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studying
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they can have a chance of working for Google or Facebook, or every
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students
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studying car technology
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they can apply for BMW or Tesla.
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, working in international companies requires high-proficient skills in English. To
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language
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as a part of
curriculum
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in high
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is a good preparation for
children
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. In conclusion, I believe
students
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should learn foreign
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language
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when they go to high
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schools
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school
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and keep
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their daily
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task response
Consider starting with a clear thesis statement that directly addresses the question (agree or disagree) in the introduction, making your position clear from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Use distinct paragraphs for each main point you are making in support of your argument. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence followed by explanation, examples, and a concluding statement.
coherence and cohesion
Increase the variety of linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments more smoothly (e.g., furthermore, in addition, consequently).
task response
Provide specific examples to effectively support your arguments. While mentioning Google, Facebook, BMW, and Tesla is a good start, delve into how knowing a foreign language directly benefits positions in such companies.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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