the pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by bookseller between 1972 and 2012

the pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by bookseller between 1972 and 2012
The three pie charts give information about the proportion of
books
sold from 1972 until 2012, by a bookseller.
Overall
, the percentages between
five
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the five
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kinds of
books
is appear
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appear
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to be balanced until the
last
year. Between 1972 and 1992,
books
about travel, children's
fiction
, adult
fiction
, biography and others,are pretty much similar, with a difference of no more than 5 per
cent
between them, with only 2 per
cent
more in 1992, when is about Children's
fiction
. Moving forward, in 2012, adult
fiction
books
,
are
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were
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almost half of sales with 45 per
cent
, being the most selling category.
However
, children's
fiction
books
remained almost the same, only 3 per
cent
more compared with 1992,
while
biography
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biographies
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had a drop, only 8 per
cent
compared with 1972, when the percentage was 20 and 15 per
cent
7 years later. Travel and other
books
had
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apply
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also
a
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apply
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decline
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declined
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when it was about to be sold in 2012,
only
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with only
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12 per
cent
for others and 10 per
cent
for travel.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, fiction, cent with synonyms.
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