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ome people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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There is an opinion saying that high educational
centers'
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fee
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 must be paid by governments in order to be accessible
for
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the
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society regardless of
people
's ability to pay for it. Admittedly,
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 believe that universities and colleges need to be pay-free for the whole community owing to a number of compelling
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.
To begin
 with, the most rational justification is that, the benefit of
this
 practice returns to the society and should be considered by governors.
That is
, the more
people
 are educated, the more they serve their nation by their capability,
therefore
; the money that
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 been founded by the government at educational
centers
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 goes back to the
people
 who are
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authorities
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responsibility
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to take
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 care
of
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 . A good illustration of
this
 is doctors who survive plenty of patients by
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skill
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 they have learnt at the university.
Furthermore
,
people
 pay
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 to get services from the government. Providing welfare
such
 as fee-free universities is The most important governmental role. Yet, another compelling argument about free
high
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 education is that in the public, everyone should have the opportunity to make
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personal progress even those who can not make enough money to reach their goals. To put it differently, poorer levels of
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society stay away
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from
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 continuing their education because they can not afford university tuition so they are not able to change their financial and cultural classes
while
 governments must pay attention to
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all social levels and their needs. Take a child who was unwanted
born
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 in a poor family as an example; he needs governmental support to have the chance to a promising future as much as other
childeren
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children
.
To conclude
, considering the points discussed above,the bottom line is that everybody needs to access free education
in
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 all levels and authorities should provide it for all classes.
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