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Write a letter to your friend describing the university you have joined recently for your post-graduation. Invite him or her to visit you sometime. In your letter: -describe your new course and university - what do you like about it - ask your friend to visit you sometime

#friend #university #post-graduation #visit #-describe #course
Dear Ali I hope you got
this
 letter and you will
pleasant
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be pleased
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 to read it. Everything is going
good
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well
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 with you . I would like to describe my new university here in Delhi which is very famous
in
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apply
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all over India. I joined here
last
 month. I
have
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am
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 pursuing here food and hygiene course in iimt
university
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University
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. You know I
always
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have always
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interested
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been interested
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 in food and beverage so as
mine
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my
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interest
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 I took
this
 course. All things
is
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are
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 good here
therefore
on
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one
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things
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thing
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 attractive
me
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to me
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that
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apply
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is
university
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a university
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 student. They are so kind and helpful. Always greetings very well
however
 you
you
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New commerce or old. I love that their way. Next month here
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logical structure
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to improve structure.
single idea per paragraph
Consider using paragraphs to separate different ideas for better readability.
complete response
Finish your letter with a proper closing statement to make it complete.
suitable writing tone
Try to maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter, matching the informal nature of writing to a friend.
task achievement
You described your new course and university, which is responsive to the task.
suitable writing tone
You have a friendly tone, appropriate for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Mentions of specific details about the university and course show engagement with the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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