The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The given line graph illustrates how many shopping centres are not working anymore and how many of them are still open to the public in a specific area in the period of time from the
year
2011 until 2018.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the data had a plateau and did not remain the same, as most of the shops
were open in 2011, however
, by the end of 2018, they were mostly closed.
To begin
with, almost 9000 shops
were open and provided service for customers, however
, this
number significantly dropped and reached 4000 in the next year
. Nonetheless
, it rose by 2000, as 6000 shops
were open until 2014. Then
, the number went back to its previous data with only 4000 to be opened until 2017 and finally
stopped by the number of 3000 in the last
year
. Closures, on the other hand
, were for 6500 shops
but increased and reached 7000 after two years afterward
. The data, Change the spelling
afterwards
although
, has experienced a dramatically downward trend, as less than 1000 places were closed by the year
2015. However
, in 2018, 5000 of all were eventually closed.Submitted by vaniaa.z.h2005 on
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