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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course - say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my great appreciation for a great cookery
course
 you organized in your academy. I finished the
course
 four weeks ago and
finally
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 ready to share
with
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my experience.
Firstly
, I would like to mention the
overall
 organization of all the processes, from advertising on Instagram to receiving the certificate.
Moreover
, the recipes were tremendously delightful and easy to follow. My family and I had several celebrations since
then
, and I have made two wonderful cakes for the parties. My mother-in-law was in total awe. Thank you very much for that. I would
also
 like to share with you with few suggestions about
the
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course
 refinement in the future. Frankly speaking, my wife and I have gained
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 two kilos after my graduation since my cooking became much more delightful. Could you please develop and launch a new raw vegan or
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course
? I would like to pass something like that to save my figure and I am ready to do an advance payment. Thanks for your time and participation. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Vasilii Rasskazov
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clarity
Try to ensure a clear and concise introduction for your letter. While the grateful tone is wonderful, a brief summary of what the letter will cover at the beginning could further enhance clarity.
sentence structure
Consider varying your sentence structures more to add sophistication and interest to your writing. Mixing complex and compound sentences can make your expression more engaging.
Task achievement
Your letter effectively expresses your satisfaction with the course, directly addressing the task’s requirements.
organization
The structure of your letter, with clear paragraphs for each main idea, enhances its readability.
tone
The warm and grateful tone is well-suited for the context, making the letter pleasant to read.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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