You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in connection with the
camera
that has just been bought from Safir shop in Oman. Use synonyms
This
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camera
is produced by your company and belongs to A serious. Use synonyms
According to
information on its Linking Words
box
and website, these cameras have particular characterisation Use synonyms
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for
example, two lenses, a place for additional memory and a cover for supporting water.
I bought the Add the comma(s)
, for
camera
Use synonyms
while
I was travelling to Oman but I did not check the Linking Words
box
of it at the store. When I Use synonyms
received
at the destination and opened the Verb problem
arrived
box
, I realised that some important items were missing from the Use synonyms
box
.
Unfortunately, I could not find one of the lenses and its supportive cover. To make matters worse, another lens was broken and there were some crashes on the body of the Use synonyms
camera
.
to rectify Use synonyms
this
situation, I recommended that Linking Words
this
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camera
be replaced with another one.
I hope that Use synonyms
this
matter will be dealt with as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
Mah KarLinking Words
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, make sure to use consistent verb tenses throughout your letter. For instance, 'When I received at the destination' should be 'When I arrived at the destination.'
task achievement
Make your request more assertive. Instead of 'I recommended that this camera be replaced,' you could write 'I request that this camera be replaced.' This will help clearly communicate your demand.
task achievement
You provided clear details about the camera, which helps to create a strong context for the problem.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone, which is suitable for the context.