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Band 2.5

WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Everything has two coins, so we should approach things rationally. some
people
 say
advetising
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advertising
 has advantages which persuade
people
 to buy things. it means that advertising
promote
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promotes
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products
. advertisings are more likely to inform
people
 about new
products
.
furthermore
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Furthermore
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. it can
also
 make
products
 more attractive in order to
attractive
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attract
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people
's attention.
for instance
, advertising covering our lives. when we go outside or travel. we can see advertising everywhere. they hang out
supermarkets
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in supermarkets
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 and every
transportions
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transportation
transportations
.
espically
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especially
 since we see advertising has
endorse
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endorsed
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products
. we are more likely to buy things, because
this
davertising
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advertising
 has our favourite stars. some
people
 think advertising is common ,so we don't pay attention to it they believe we should be encouraged to follow the
lastest
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latest
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 trends.some advertising provides misleading information,
for instance
.if
people
 have their own children who can easily influenced by advertisements. In my opinion. we should treat it
reationally
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rationally
relationally
. advertising has its
strength
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strengths
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 and
weakness
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weaknesses
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. so for its weakness. the
goverment
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government
 should
regulated
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regulate
be regulated
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,
instead
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instead,
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 we should make good use of advertising, which can
be bring
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bring
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entertainments
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entertainment
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in
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into
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 our lives and contribute to the economy.
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Introduction Statement
Try to clearly state your opinion in the introduction to give a clear overview of your stance on the topic.
Paragraph Structure
Structure your essay into clear paragraphs - one for the introduction, at least two for the body paragraphs (discussing each view), and one for the conclusion.
Use of examples
Use more specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument more persuasive and engaging.
Grammar and Spelling
Be mindful of grammar and spelling errors. Proofreading can help eliminate these mistakes and improve your score.
Balanced Discussion
You've provided a balanced view by discussing both perspectives on advertising before giving your own opinion.
Conclusion
The conclusion nicely summarizes your stance and suggests a reasoned approach towards advertising.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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