The pie charts show the revenue source for U.S. highways for last year and U.S. highway expenditure by type for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relecant.

This
pie chart depicts U.S. highway expenditure by type for the recent year,
furthermore
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and furthermore
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the revenue source for U.S. highways for
last
year. It is clear from the graph that Motor-fuel Taxes is the
hithest
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highest
spending ,
otherwise
Tolls spending 6.2% which is the lowest rate in the pie graph.
According to
what is shown, Motor-Fuel Taxes experienced
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a
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soar it become 25.1% . come after that in terms of high General Funds, it experienced rapidly rose 23.4% as a number,
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the rest is
least
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than 20.3% expect Others it is the third of terms of increase, the percentage is 20.3%.
To sum up
I could say that
although
the highways were in rose in
last
year there
is
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are
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charts experienced fall which are Moton Vehicle Taxes
descripe
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describe
13.0% ,12.1% in Bonds rate a
together with
TolIs the only one who dramatically declined to 6.2%, to end it here I will say that all the charts were in climb expect the
last
three were in decrease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revenue sources
  • expenditure
  • proportions
  • significant disparities
  • maintenance
  • expansion
  • administration
  • safety improvements
  • correlated
  • mismatches
  • aligned categories
  • efficiency
  • priorities
  • budgeting
  • sustainability
  • infrastructure
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