The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and the threats to plant life.

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species
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extinctions and the threats to plant life from 2000 to 2100 in the tropical forests.
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, it is apparent that
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there will be an increased pattern in the extinction of plant and animal species by 2060 and the line will witness a significant decrease from 2060 to 2100
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threats to plant life
divided
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2
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into 2

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factor
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namely, human impact and natural events. Regarding
line
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graph,
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extinction
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the extinction

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of flora and fauna
have
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has

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increased gradually from around 2000 to 10.000 between 2000 and 2020, in the following decades the number of
extinction
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extinctions

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reached 30,000
in
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at

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the same increasing level. In the next years from 2050 to
2060
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2060,

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the line graph saw a sharp increase from 30.000 to approximately 49.000,
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and than
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and than

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than
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trend
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the trend

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will experience a gradual decrease without any fluctuation from around 50.000 to 28.000 between 2060 and 2100. In terms of
threating
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threatening

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factors, it is easily seen that
human
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humans

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effect
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affect

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on environment more than natural events (disasters, other events) with almost 60%. Human
affects
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effects

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include different aspects mainly harvesting (14.4%), development (10.4),logging(9.7%) and livestock, disturbance ,
plantations
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and plantations

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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