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The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set up.

The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set up.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of
joblessness
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jobless
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womens
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women
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 in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. It can be
seem
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seen
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 that in England female
unemployment
 rate has slightly
deceased
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decreased
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 from 6.8%
till
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to
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 6.5% in 2014.Wales experienced a more significant growth.In 2013 the proportion of unemployed
female
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females
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 was 5.4% and shrank a little in 2014
till
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to
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 5.0%.
Moreover
,the situation was similar to Northern Ireland,
where
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which
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 experienced a
sharply
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sharp
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 decline
of
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in
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unemployed
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the unemployed
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 female ratio from 5.6% in 2013
till
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to
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 4.6% in 2014.
Nevertheless
,Scotland showed
an
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the
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 opposite trend.The percentage of unemployed women
gone
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went
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 upwards from 6.1% in 2013
till
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to
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 6.7% in 2014 making it the only
one
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apply
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country in
UK
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the UK
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 where
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate rose during
this
 period.
Overall
, the data indicate a general improvement in female
unemployment
 rates in most of the UK, except for Scotland. Northern Ireland achieved the most significant reduction,
while
 Scotland recorded the highest rate of
unemployment
by
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in
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 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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