The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The two provided maps depict the development of an island before and after the establishment of tourist attractions.
From a broad perspective, most of the previously empty areas have been transformed into accommodation buildings.
Additionally
, facilities Linking Words
such
as a swimming pool, restaurant, reception area, and pier have been constructed.
Following the construction phase, approximately 15 accommodations have been added and are dispersed across the west and east sides of the island. A scenic restaurant with a captivating sea view has been erected to cater meals to guests. Numerous footpath tracks have been laid around the accommodation buildings to ensure safe pedestrian access. Linking Words
Moreover
, vehicle tracks have been strategically placed around the reception area to facilitate convenience for car and motorcycle drivers. Towards the northwest, visitors can access a newly built swimming pool located near the beach. Linking Words
Finally
, tourists have the option to stroll southward, cross the pier, and embark on sailboat rides across the sea.Linking Words
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