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It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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In contemporary society, fast
fashion
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 has consistently been a topic of interest among the masses. The statement "Buying few expensive and high-quality
clothes
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 is better than buying numerous cheaper and short-life
clothes
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" presents a viewpoint
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 both thought-provoking and debatable.
While
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 there are compelling arguments in favour of
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 perspective, there are
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 significant reasons to approach it with scepticism. Despite its contentious nature, I am completely inclined to endorse the viewpoint, as I believe fash
fashion
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 contributes to extreme global warming. There is little doubt that in a fast-changing society, the average time someone wears something is only seven. I believe
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 illegal huge trend really stems from social media. People want to take gorgeous photos to put on Instagram but they are unwilling to pay so much money for it
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 the same
clothes
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 can not appear on social media pages the second time. Companies
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 as Shein, which is from China, need to take responsibility for climate change. Enormous discarded
clothes
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 from Shein are piling up in landfill sites and fibre fragments are flowing into the sea. It is
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 reasonable that buying lots of cheap
clothes
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 is a terrible perspective.
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, the main part of those cheaper
clothes
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 are produced in India and China which are called the developed
countries
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, and those
countries
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 are now responsible for making the vast bulk of all the
clothes
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 that are sold around the world. Because of the trend we call "Chasing the cheapest needle", the
fashion
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 industry constantly looking to undercut competitors and
therefore
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 the price of
clothes
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 is cheaper, which is
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 means that the labourers in developed
countries
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 can not earn sufficient salaries for stable lives.
Such
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 instances elaborate that
fashion
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 trends should not only be blamed for contributing to global warming, but
also
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 for unequal labourers' rights. In conclusion,
while
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 buying cheap
clothes
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 can enhance people's outlook and increase their personal reputation on social media, it is crucial to acknowledge the fast
fashion
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 trend only destroys the planet and increases the unequal gap between giant
countries
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 and developed
countries
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. Given these considerations, my allegiance that buying a few high-costed
clothes
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 is better is steadfastly consolidated and incontrovertibly firm.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • long-lasting
  • cost-per-wear
  • economical
  • investing
  • ethical manufacturing
  • transparent
  • exclusivity
  • designs
  • mass-produced
  • accessibility
  • budget
  • fast fashion
  • trends
  • maintenance
  • dry cleaning
  • social status
  • psychological implications
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