As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?
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of the most widely discussed issues nowadays is the level of pollution in many cities caused by private cars
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However
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One
of the main aspects of the problem is that cars
are not an eco-friendly transport. The smell that they reproduce is not healthy for your body. One
of the main reasons behind that is
cars
use
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cars
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global warming or might result in the death of some animal species.
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is the best and easiest way to prevent a
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