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More adults work from home as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there is an argument about whether working from
home
 provides positive or negative outcomes to society. In my opinion, I believe that working remotely has more benefits that outweigh the drawbacks.
This
 essay will cover three reasons that support the argument.
To begin
, it is obvious that the most essential benefit of doing
work
 at
home
 is less expenses compared to going to the office. The office workers are obliged to the cost of transportation, food, and clothing,
while
 working from
home
 has no commuting expenditure,
also
 homemade food costs less.
Therefore
, there will be less financial burden for those who
work
 at
home
 in the long run.
In addition
, people would have more time since they do not need to travel to
work
 as mentioned above. Normally, people require around half to one hour to prepare themselves, with another 2-3 hours a day for commuting.
Hence
, working from
home
 saves them at least two hours, which they could spend with their families or personal interests. More time could be spent on more meaningful and useful activities.
Furthermore
, there is
also
 a positive effect on the environment. Since there is less traffic, the pollution gases emitted by vehicles decrease. As Thailand is currently facing a severe air pollution problem, promoting remote
work
 in the urban areas would alleviate the issue. In conclusion, working from
home
 has positive effects on people's daily lives, as in less daily cost, and more time.
Also
, it potentially helps the pollution and climate problems.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote work
  • flexible hours
  • work-life balance
  • commuting
  • carbon footprint
  • social isolation
  • digital divide
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • company culture
  • employee engagement
  • sustainable work practices
  • collaborative tools
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