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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should write at least 150 words. » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should write at least 150 words. » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.
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The graph illustrates the different kinds of transport used to commute to and from
work
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 in one European city in 1960, 1980, and 2000.
Overall
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, the most popular means of transport have changed every 20 years. At
first,
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it was "foot" and in 1980, it was "bus".
Lastly
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, in 2000, "car" was the most preferred means.
To begin
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 with, only about 7% of people went to
work
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 by car in 1960. Notably,
"car"
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the "car"
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 gained popularity dramatically after 20 years. It was 25% in 1980 and became the most used transport among 4 categories in 2000, with around 36%.
However
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, the usage of bikes depicted the opposite trend of cars.
Initially
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, more than 25% commute to
work
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 by
bikes
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bike
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, but it gradually lost dominance and reached approximately 6% in 2000.
Likewise
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, more and more people were reluctant to go to
work
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by
Change preposition
on
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 foot as time
goes
Wrong verb form
went
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 by. The percentage of individuals who go to the office area
by
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on
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walk
Correct article usage
a walk
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 was 35% in the beginning, but it dropped to around 17% in 1980 and 10% in 2000, respectively. People's preference towards bus showed a minor fluctuation. One-fifth tend to use
bus
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the bus
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 when they commute to
work
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 in 1960. It
then
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 rose to upper 25% in 1980 and fell to about 17% in the end.
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