The diagram below shows a small local museum and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007.
The diagram illustrates a local
museum
and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007. Overall
, many trees were uprooted and various facilities were erected around the museum
.
First,
the previous local history room
was changed into a reception area in 2007. Moreover
, a national history exhibition space disappeared and switched into a local history room
. The building was enlarged and a museum
shop was added to the west side of the site. A room
for the museum
store transformed into a cafe. Furthermore
, to the north side of the building, a room
for special exhibitions and education was added.
Numerous trees were cut down and a large car park was constructed instead
. Due to
this
construction, the previous car lane was knocked down. Likewise
, a long trees
which were located along the road had been uprooted. Correct the article-noun agreement
long trees
a long tree
In addition
, the garden area had been reduced and the entrance was moved to the museum
shop. Lastly
, a hall for the entrance was demolished.Submitted by aahhyu111 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, room with synonyms.
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