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Online courses make conventional classrooms unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#courses #classrooms
Nowadays, there
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 a lot of online courses around the globe that facilities
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 not necessary. As my perception, I disagree with
this
 trend since
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limit
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 social development among people.
While
 online courses
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 used by a wide range of people, building places
such
 as
classroom
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 and other facilities is not an
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important
 thing these days.
As people
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, tend to communicate even when they are at home
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Introduction and Conclusion
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Supporting Details
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations to strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of connectors and linking phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Response
Complete your essay by fully addressing the task. This includes covering both sides of the argument if needed and providing a clear opinion.
Position
You present a clear viewpoint, which is a good start towards developing an argument.
Topic Relevance
The topic of online education vs. traditional classrooms is well-chosen and timely.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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