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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Learning languages
beside
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 your mother tongue
have
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 become a trend and necessity for an Individual who wants to relocate
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 other territories. A group of people
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 that the only reason behind learning
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language
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 is to
atudy
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study
 or work in
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a foreign
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 nation;
however
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, others argue that learning a new vocation is not only limited to
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 abroad or working there,
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notions and argue in favour of latter one.
To begin
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 with the former view, proponents contend that folks only learn new speech because they want to travel
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 another country or if they are planning to relocate.
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, during travelling you need to communicate
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 others in case you are lost
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 your
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,
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 you can ask for their assistance,
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, if you want to study abroad you will
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 to understand lectures in
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language
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.
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, if a person gets admission to a university in Canada and
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does not know
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language
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then
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 it will be difficult for him to understand the concept.
On the other hand
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, others and I believe that the rationale for learning secondary vocation is not only limited to travelling and working abroad, but it
also
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 helps in inter-personal relationships of countries and it promotes global interaction. To explain, speaking
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language
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 is essential for
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people who are presenting their countries in global level competitions like
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.
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, to understand
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 conflicts
individual
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individuals
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 should know other languages. Learning secondary speech provides you
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a feeling
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 of self-confidence in an individual.
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,
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adaptation
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of
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new
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 vocation is
a
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paramount for
traveling
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travelling
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 and
study
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studying
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 or working
in
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abroad, I personally believe
that is
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also
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 important for taking part in global competition, maintaining interpersonal connections with residents of other
nation
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nations
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, and for self-confidence.

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Introduction
Make sure to clearly state your own opinion in the introduction to set a clear direction for the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to separate your ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea that is developed and explained.
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Incorporate a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your essay and make your arguments more cohesive.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples to support your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and engaging.
Grammar & Accuracy
Carefully proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity. Consider revising sentences that may be confusing due to incorrect language use.
Sentence Variety
You have used a variety of sentence structures, which can add interest to your text and demonstrate linguistic ability.
Argument Engagement
You engaged with the topic and presented arguments from both sides, which is a good approach for this type of essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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