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the table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of britian. the table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed

the table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of britian. the table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed
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The table and the chart illustrate the amount of
money
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 that the UK police earns from a variety of sources and expenditures of the
money
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 including salaries, technology and facilities in 2017 and 2018.
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 the figures, it can be seen that an immense amount of
budget
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 comes from the National Government and they spend their
money
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 mostly on the income of officers and
staffs
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. The total
budget
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 they received in 2018 was nearly more than
2017
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in 2017
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 by 14
million
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. The National authority provided them 177.8
million
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 in 2018 and 175.5
million
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 in 2017.
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, The
budget
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 from Local Taxes was roughly three times
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the other sources,
such
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 as grants, which were 38.5
million
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 and 38
million
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 respectively. The police
budget
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 expensed on their salaries, occupied 69% in 2018 and 75% in 2017. In both years, buildings and transport were registered
at
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in
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 the same proportion, at 17%.
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, They spent their
money
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 on technology the least which was about 14% in 2018 and only 8% in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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