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The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates information about The top
ten
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 internet
users
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 of many countries in the world in 2016 and the data provides the number and percentage of
users
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 in each of the countries.
Overall
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, what stands out from the table summary is that China has the most
users
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 of the top
ten
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 countries. The second was India and the 10th was Mexico.
According to
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 the 1st-6th from the top
ten
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, the number of
users
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 was more than 100
million
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. China has
users
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 at around 700
million
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 which was the peak of all
while
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 both India and the U.S. had approximately 400
million
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 and 200
million
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.
However
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, Brazil, Japan and Russia were similar at just over 100
million
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.
In addition
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, The 7th-10th from the top
ten
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, there were less than 100
million
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while
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 Nigeria was the highest in
this
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 group at around 86
million
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.
Moreover
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, Germany had just over 70
million
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while
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 The UK and Mexico were as well at around 60
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ten, users, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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