It is sometimes said that young people want too much freedom and pay too little attention to the advice of older people. Do you agree or disagree?
There is quite an obvious discussion around the topic of younger generations.
While
some people
believe that families can get advice to teenagers
that can control all children, I would argue that teenagers
would like to have more freedom and independence by themselves. I will explain my reasons in this
essay.
This
is no doubt that young people
may think that they are superior to the elderly as they have better education. This
is because older people
do not have enough knowledge about the new technologies that we use for connection in this
day. For example
, some older people
can not use the internet to connect with gadgets, social media
platforms and they can not teach and communicate with their younger ones in the same stories. As a result
, younger people
can not receive advice from older people
when they would like to know about updated information and new technologies.
It is worth pointing out that younger generations can learn new things from social media
. This
is based on the fact that in this
day youngsters are influenced by phones and the internet which can allow them to learn new things and connect with people
who are the same age as them. For instance
, in Thailand the teenager can create groups on social media
platforms such
as Facebook, Line and Instagram that can connect all younger people
around the world to talk and exchange their knowledge. Consequently
, teenagers
are likely to have the independence to spend their lifestyles using social media
.
In conclusion, we can observe that teenagers
would like to have their own freedom and be more independent. I firmly believe that the older can get less advice to teenager about the information that they are not familiar with.Submitted by v.mahatkomol on
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Make sure your arguments are clear and supported by relevant examples. While you've used examples, more specific details would enhance your argument.
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For higher marks, ensure a clear position throughout your essay. While you've stated your stance, reinforcing it in the conclusion strengthens your argument.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You have used relevant examples to support your argument, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
