Write about the following topic. Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

Nowadays, The majority of universities are increasing the use of technology in their courses studying online. There are pros and cons so In
this
essay I am discussing more advantages. On the one hand, these days all over the world universities use online
studies
. it is very easy for the tutor and the student.
Therefore
, they provide the lecturer with a group through the Zoom app.
For example
, during the COVID pandemic
time
all over the world studied using the website online.
Therefore
, it is very helpful for
students
.
As a result
, they are able to do their study properly.
Moreover
, that way there is no wasting
time
on other things like the financial side. Because
students
can not spend money to rent a house or go to the bus for
university
for most wresting
time
and money.
That is
why it is very easy to online study.
For instance
, my brother he is every day going to the
university
by bus. He is very exhausted.
Then
he comes back home her cannot do anything.
therefore
, online
studies
are more and more convenient for them for the student.
On the other hand
, the same one who goes to the
university
for lectures. They have to buy a rented house and they have to spend a lot of
time
with their friends.
Furthermore
, a student who sits in the lecture room for a long
time
is very lazy and exhausted. They do not get the right thing. When
students
go out they love to have fun more than
students
. In conclusion, these days the majority of
students
are used to online
studies
so it is very useful for their financial side
and
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like the COVID pandemic
time
.But
they
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are going
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to
the
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university
they are addicted to more entertainment
more
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than
studies
.
therefore
, making online
studies
more convenient for tutors and
students
.
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Task Achievement
Good use of a real-world example (COVID pandemic) to support your points about the benefits of online learning.
Coherence & Cohesion
Effectively communicated the main advantages of online learning, focusing on convenience and financial benefits.

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