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The table below shows the population changes of several animal types from 2011 to 2016. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the population changes of several animal types from 2011 to 2016. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the line chart provides the wildlife
population
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 changes of three different types of animals including bears, dolphins and
whales
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 between 2011 to 2016.
Overall
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, the
population
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 of wild bears skyrocketed in the given time, whilst that of dolphins plummeted and that of
whales
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 fluctuated and
finally
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 went back to the original number in 2016.
According to
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 the information shown in the line chart, the
population
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 of wild bears was the fewest among the three kinds of wildlife in 2011 and their
population
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 soared from one
thousand
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 bears to almost 200
thousand
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 bears during the given five years which became the most.
By contrast
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, the number of
dolphin's
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dolphins
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 was the most in the beginning 150
thousand
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 and it reduced to zero in 2016. What should be particularly mentioned is the fluctuation of the whale
population
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, which was 15
thousand
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 in 2011 and decreased to 50
thousand
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 after a year as the
population
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 of bears reached 50
thousand
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 in the meantime and that of
whales
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 witnessed a two-times growth by 100
thousand
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 from 2012 to 2013. After fluctuating in the rest 3 years, the figure for
whales
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 ultimately returned to 75
thousand
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 In 2016.
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