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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009.

The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009.
The table illustrates the
amount
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 of wages of
teachers
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 who taught in secondary school in 2009.
Overall
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, as can be seen in the figure
Luxembourg
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 had the highest
amount
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 of paying for its
teachers
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.
In contrast
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, Australia had the lowest
amount
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 of salary among the other countries. First of all, in 2009 the
amount
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 of wage in
Luxembourg
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 started from 80
dollars
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 which was the highest
amount
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 of payment in that time.
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, the base salary per year for
teachers
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 in
Luxembourg
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 was 112000 USD which was doubled in comparison to other nations.
Although
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 Japan's starting wage was the lowest
amount
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, 28
dollars
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, but yearly income of
teachers
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 in Australia in spite of having
better-starting
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 salaries than Japan, was the lowest with 48000 USD per year. Second of all, in
Luxembourg
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, tutors could earn money at
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last
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least
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 139000
dollars
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 which was 55000
dollars
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 higher than in Korea but to reach
this
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 position they had to work for almost 30 years.
In Contrast
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, the highest
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 of salary was reachable for
teachers
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 after 8 years of teaching which was the lowest
amount
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 of time.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, teachers, luxembourg, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 8 times.
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