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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will able to read everything they want in online without paying. to what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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There is currently a contentious argument that through free online services,
people
 will stop purchasing physical newspapers and
books
 in the future.
This
 essay will discuss that a digital book is more convenient than a
hardcopy
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.
That is
 why I totally agree with
this
 opinion. 
Initially
, the main reason why I believe that digital papers are way more convenient is that
people
, especially students, are not required to carry a lot of
books
, thousands of pages can easily
fit-in
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fit
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in
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into
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 one tablet only.
Moreover
, in the present era, ebooks and other documents are now digitised, and it took less than printing a thousand
books
. I believe with a few years of revolution there will be no more paper things.
For instance
, the budget to enrol in a university no longer reaches a million pounds because they can just create digital
books
 and documents and send
it
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them
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 by email or using an online platform as a method to lecture. Another reason
this
 modernisation will happen is,
people
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that people
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 from around the world are more aware of ecological things and as far we know that paperless is better for the world.
Furthermore
, by spending a little more budget to subscribe to an online news platform,
people
 can
also
 spend more time, and preserve the earth rather than going to the nearest newspaper stall to purchase some newspaper.
To conclude
, I respectfully agree with the fully digitised newspaper and book, there will be a lot of positive
impact
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such
 as supporting a green peace, and pressing a budget for a routine.
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Logical structure and clear progression of ideas through the essay.
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Effective use of supporting points to argue the benefits of digital over print media.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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