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For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter -state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this -give details of how you have benefited from the club -explain why you want to leave

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Dear Sir, I am writing to notify you that I am unable to maintain my membership at your BigEra fitness
club
, a decision that carries significant weight for me. As a premium member with registration number P5262, I currently pay a monthly subscription fee of $120 for access to the facilities at Steam, Sona, and the spa. When I first joined your
club
last
 year, I weighed 96 kg, but thanks to the
club
's facilities and guidance from expert trainers, I have managed to transform my physique and now weigh 75 kg with a more muscular body. I greatly appreciate how your
club
 has positively impacted my
overall
 physical well-being, particularly with the added benefits of receiving free fitness advice and the opportunity to relax in the steam and spa areas after my workouts.
However
,
due to
 completing my studies in
this
 city and securing a job located 35 km away, it is no longer feasible for me to commute to the
club
 daily. I kindly request the cancellation of my subscription, which I have paid for the next three months online. Following the deduction of any processing fees, I would appreciate it if you could transfer the remaining amount to my bank account. I am hopeful that circumstances will allow me to rejoin your
club
 in the future. Yours faithfully, Jacob Brown
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