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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity (those teaching programmes that involve the use of written materials, videos, televised lessons and the Internet), but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today, there is an argument between people who believe that online teaching has become more famous than before,
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 other individuals believe that
this
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 method is not comparable to in-person learning in universities.
This
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 essay will agree that
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 learning will provide a situation where
students
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 can reduce their costs of learning
as well as
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access
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 to syllabi at any
time
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 they need. On the one hand, learning
college
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 courses via the internet that involve visual materials is now becoming more popular these days. Since a lot of
college
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students
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 spend most of their
time
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 in heavy traffic jams or
traveling
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 long distances to reach their campuses,
this
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 circumstance puts them at risk of monetary problems.
However
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, staying at home and learning from a
distance
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 can help them to reduce their costs and save some money.
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, it is not possible for everyone to attend
classes
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 on
time
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, so, having
access
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 to teaching materials at any
time
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 not only gives pupils enough
time
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 to attend teaching seasons at any
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 but
also
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 they can
access
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 a syllabus multiple times.
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,
according to
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 a survey which was conducted 2 years ago in Iran,
college
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students
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 who took attendance
classes
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 online were situated in better monetary positions.
On the other hand
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, these days some people think that spending
time
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 in person in university
classes
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 is more beneficial compared to
distance
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 learning. They believe that if
students
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 attend
classes
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 and are taught face-to-face, they will understand lessons more effectively.
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, some pupils only attend in classrooms and do not pay attention to their professors.
As a result
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, studying in person not only has no results for them but
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 they waste their
time
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 for long hours
instead
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 of doing some useful activities.
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, the success rate of
students
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 who spent their
time
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 preparing
classes
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 for university entry exams was only 20% in 2020 in Iran
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 more than 80% of online
students
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 were successful. In conclusion,
distance
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 learning which uses the internet and other visual equipment has been getting famous
while
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 some people believe that
this
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 trend can not be as effective as in-person
classes
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 in
college
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.
This
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 essay agrees that online learning can reduce the amount of money which is used on transportation, and
access
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 to course syllabi is the main advantage.
In contrast
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, not paying too much attention to tutors and waste of
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 are the main drawbacks of face-to-face learning.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clear distinction between your supporting arguments and counterarguments to enhance the reader's understanding.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider integrating more sophisticated linking words or phrases to improve the flow between ideas.
Task Achievement
To further improve task response, ensure that each paragraph directly supports your position with a clear topic sentence at the beginning.
Language Use
Incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and to more precisely convey your arguments.
Task Achievement
Successfully addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages of distance learning and considering the opposite viewpoint.
Examples
Good use of examples to support your points, making your arguments more persuasive.
Coherence & Cohesion
Logical structure of the essay, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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