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in some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Is it a positive or negative development.

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It is true that the choice of living alone among many individuals in several parts of the world is becoming common.
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 my perspective, it is completely a welcoming approach. There are certain reasons which prove it to be a positive
trend
. The first and
the
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foremost is that people who choose to live alone may become
self reliant
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 than those who prefer to live with their family members. One has to learn how to cook, wash the dishes,
cleaning
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, pay bills and manage his budget and time. All of these are valuable skills of life which
also
results
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 in the person's skill development. Apart from
it
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,
one-person
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the one-person
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 household is
also
 beneficial for the economy as
this
trend
 will lead to
greater
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 demand
of
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 houses for
accomodation
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accommodation
. Especially,
this
 will be beneficial for the construction industry. Another important fact in favour of
such
 a
trend
 is that a person living
seperate
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separately
 gets
opportunity
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 to experience the luxury of personal space. They have the power to decorate and arrange their
appartment
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apartment
 in their own way
accordingly
. They can engage themselves in
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activities and hobbies without any disturbance and enjoy
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uninterrupted peace.
In addition
 to it, humans who prefer to live solo
becomes
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 responsible.
This
 is because whatever happens in their life, they will be held
resposible
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responsible
. One can learn to manage his own tasks and complete them by oneself.
To conclude
, I
reitrate
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reiterate
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trend
 of living alone among individuals is considered largely a positive development.
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Task Achievement
Ensure a balanced argument by exploring both positive and negative aspects of the topic, even if your stance is clear. This will provide a more comprehensive response.
Task Achievement
Consider adding a short paragraph on potential drawbacks or challenges of living alone to present a balanced view, supporting your argument for its positive aspects more convincingly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance your argument by incorporating a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and avoid repetition.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and to clearly express complex ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Effectively structured essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Successfully conveyed personal standpoint with relevant examples and comprehensive explanation.

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