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Many people believe that music is just a form of entertaintment, whilst others beliee that music has a much larger impact on society today. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (250 words)

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It is considered that
music
 is an ancient
art
 and it depicts its own realm which is changing throughout generations.
On the other
hand
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 the rest of the
people
 who are not sophisticated enough about
this
 topic seem just as entertained.
This
 essay will look through both questions and explain whether it is just a leisure activity or a work of
art
. Human beings were interested in various domains and one remains as
music
.
Music
 is not just simple emotions or easily considered topics. It is a form of
art
, which passes over generations. Artists or simply musicians for whom it is a whole life. They can not imagine any other forms of
art
 and only thrive on it. Lives of
people
 who are given their time to do pieces of
music
 and not just for fun it is their destiny. The rest of the
people
 who are not outstanding in their lives do not question themselves about craft or
music
. They do not like being up in the clouds and searching for inspiration. Their lives remain here on Earth not out of it. It is
also
 totally normal to live and feel more materialistic. Their own truth is do not get anything in their way of accomplishing goals.
To conclude
 as an author and human being who questions a lot about the universe and
people
's destinies. I can purely understand both opinions but can not comprehend being an artist myself as I am not. Life for me is easy and not as predictable as for the rest of
people
.
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