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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

your local hospital has advertised for people to do some unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. in your letter - explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital -Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do -give details of when you would be available for this work

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Dear Sir/Madam I hope
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 letter finds you well and in good health. I am writing
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 letter in response to the advertisement that I saw in the newspaper, for which I am interested in offering some help in my free hours. Introducing myself, I am a full-time student at the University of Chicago doing my bachelor's in Medicine. As I was suggested by my professor, having hands-on experience helps me to a great extent with the courses that I am pursuing right now.
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, my courses are mainly focused on nutrient deficiencies so I am interested in assisting with the blood test department.
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, I am not available on most of the weekdays but I am willing to join even on weekends. My availability includes Tuesday's, Saturday's and Sunday's.
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, I am looking to work in the mornings from 6 am to 12 pm as I
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 need to finish up my assignments. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sasha Kota.

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Task Achievement
Your letter effectively addresses the task's requirements, presenting a clear reason for your interest, the type of work you're interested in, and your availability. To enhance task achievement, ensure every aspect of the task is thoroughly covered, including expanding on how your skills could specifically benefit the hospital.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've structured your letter well, with each paragraph focusing on a separate aspect of your offer. For coherence and cohesion, consider using linking words more effectively to ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs.
Greeting and Closing
Clear and appropriate introduction and conclusion, enhancing the letter's presentation.
Task Achievement
Personal introduction related to your field of study, providing a strong rationale for your offer to help.
Task Achievement
Details of availability are clearly stated, directly responding to the task's requirements.
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