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Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ● Explain why you cannot go anymore ● Say who can go instead of you ● Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Nancy , I am sorry to cancel the movie appointment because my mother has not been well lately and she is now admitted to the hospital near her house. As you know , she is pretty old and weak . She will need to go through surgery tomorrow.
That is
 the reason that I am going to have to stay with her for a month. My train will leave at 6 pm tomorrow morning. So , I will not be able to join you tomorrow . But I have spoken to Tracy about
this
 movie and asked her whether she could join you
instead
. She was very over the moon as the co-star in the movie was her favourite actor. The good thing is that she lives near your house and you will only need to pick her up on the way to the theater. How does it sound ? I will make it up to you when I come back . Don't be mad at me . Get back to me as soon as possible. Best wishes, Sandi
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Keep practicing varying your sentence structures and using a range of cohesive devices to link ideas more seamlessly.
task achievement
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writing tone
Your letter has a warm and appropriate tone for writing to a friend, showing good control over the style of your writing.
task achievement
You effectively covered all points required by the prompt in a clear and logical manner.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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