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The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides information about the volume of gas emissions in four
countries
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, namely the USA, the UK, Austria, Australia, and New Zealand, measured in millions of tonnes.
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, it is obvious from the graph that the northern hemisphere
countries
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 have higher
air
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pollution
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 than
that
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of
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the southern hemisphere
countries
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.
According to
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 the graph,
americans
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Americans
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 suffer from the worst
air
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 quality as their
air
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pollution
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 level reaches a high of 80, becoming the leading nation to emit gas emissions. Meanwhile, the UK and Austria share the same figures for
air
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pollution
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 to become the runner-up amounting to half as much as the USA produces.
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, the
neighboring
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countries
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, Australia and New Zealand, can breathe the cleanest
air
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 as they generate smaller volumes of gas emissions compared to the other nations. Australia generates a slight level of
air
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pollution
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 above New Zealand accounting for 35 and 30 respectively.
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