You participated in a public event organized at a local park. Write a letter to the event organizer. In your letter tell them some feedback about the event; explain what you particularly enjoyed; give some suggestions for improvement.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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epistle regarding the public event of gathering the local inhabitants , It was an incredible experience to meet all the residents in one place. Honestly, not only me but
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members of my family were awestruck by the magnificent beauty of the park, and the way you decorated the flowers amused us a lot.
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, my parents usually tend to stay at home , but yesterday after attending
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event, their mindsets were changed , as today they went for a walk. Let me talk about the event, all activities were admirable, especially those moments when the entire city's dwellers danced together without having any hard feelings for each other impressed me a lot.
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, I do enjoy the continental food , which you have particularly arranged for all of us.
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all arrangements were up to mark, we were confronting the problem of less space for sitting. I want the next time if you can provide some additional chairs. I hope you do not mind my suggestion Yours Faithfully, Raheel
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Tense Consistency
To enhance clarity, maintain consistency in verb tense throughout the letter.
Sentence Variation
Consider varying sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
Detailed Suggestions
For more impactful suggestions, explicitly state how the improvements could enhance the event experience for participants.
Positive Feedback
Successfully communicated appreciation for the event's organization and offered constructive feedback.
Engagement Through Personal Touch
Effectively used a personal perspective to reflect on the event's impact, enhancing reader engagement.
Polite and Considerate Closure
The closing of the letter is polite and respects the recipient, making the suggestions feel considerate.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • event organizer
  • public event
  • local park
  • feedback
  • organized
  • community engagement
  • performances
  • logistical
  • facilities
  • crowd management
  • inclusivity
  • local businesses
  • atmosphere
  • volunteer
  • memorable
  • suggestions for improvement
  • upcoming events
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