The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones, 2016-2019.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones, 2016-2019.
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the main reasons why
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adolescents in an
africa
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African
country used their phones from 2016 to 2019,
according to
the surveys.
Overall
, when having already found the mean, most teenagers
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time with their devices on social networks
such
as Facebook, Instagram and Google,
on the other hand
, phone calls are rarely used in the country.
Firstly
, in 2016, social networks occupied half of the chart with 50% and email was a quarter,
besides
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25
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were the areas of digital cameras and phone calls.
Additionally
, a year later,
2017
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, 3
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of
first
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2 usages was shifted into the
last
one.
Secondly
, the results showed that the crowds started using
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cameras and online
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increasingly
while
other reasons were devalued
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5% in 2018 when compared to the previous session,
furthermore
, the change was obvious in 2019 since both social
netwroks
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networks
and digital cameras were raised as main factors.
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