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The bar graph below shows the number of tourists visiting two different cities by season. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the number of tourists visiting two different cities by season. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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2. The bar chart shows us
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the
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number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 in Dover and Troy by
seasons
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season
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. The highest
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 in Dover was in winter and the lowest in spring. The highest
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 was 25000. The highest
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 in Troy was in summer. It was 22500
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tourist
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tourists
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. The
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 was increasing between spring and winter. The
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 increasing during the year in
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Dover
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dover
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Dover
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourist with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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