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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items by season.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items by season.
The given bar chart illustrates the mean of everyday sales, by
a
Correct article usage
the
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 number of servings.
It is clear that
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 in
winter
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 the most sold
types
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type
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 of serving was hot
coffee
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 ,
however
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, in summer was iced
coffee
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.
In addition
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,
salad
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the salad
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 was disposed of in two seasons. Turning to the details, in
winter
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 the amount of portion of hot
coffee
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 was the best-selling (approximately 75). The ice cream and salad were sold out the same way (above 25) in the same seasons. Meanwhile, in
winter
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 the less traded type of serving was iced
coffee
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 around 2. Turning to other details, in the summer the most sold purchased production was iced
coffee
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 which was the proxy of hot
coffee
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 in the hot period. The soup and salad were sold equally more than 20. Even so ice cream sold more compared to the
winter
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 period by around about 5

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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