The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it likes now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it likes now.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate
plan
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the plan
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for
floor
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the floor
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in a particular public library
about
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for about
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20 years and
latest
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the latest
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development.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there
is
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are
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a lot of differences in
replacement
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the replacement
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of facilities.
Initially
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, in the
north western
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northwestern
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of the library, there
were
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was
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a
room
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which contained CDs,
vidoes
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videos
and games with
computer
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the computer
a computer
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.
Besides
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, in the next
room
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, visitors could find many adult fiction
books
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there. To the
south west
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southwest
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, there was a reading
room
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which connected with
previous
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the previous
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room
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and
providing
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provided
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many newspapers and magazines. In front of chairs and
table
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tables
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was
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apply
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located in the centre of the building is
entrance
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the entrance
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.
In
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On
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the right side of
this
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sites
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site
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, there were three facilities.
Firstly
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, a space that consisted of some children's
book
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books
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.
Next,
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it was followed by
adult
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an adult
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non-fiction
books
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room
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and enquiry desk which provided tickets, book returns
and
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apply
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etc. Nowadays, it
find
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finds
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out that there are
also
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some changes and developments
of
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in
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the library's layout. The children's fiction
books
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is
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are
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located to the
south west
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southwest
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which is equipped with a couple of sofas and storytelling events. Next to
this
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room
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are 2 rooms which give all
kind
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kinds
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of reference
books
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and
computer
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computers
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respectively.
In
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On
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the right side, there are three rooms
which
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apply
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linked together. The lecture
room
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is positioned to the
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southeast
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south east
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southeast
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which is connected with
space
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a space
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area of adult fiction
books
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,
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an information
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information
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an information
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desk and self-service machines.
Finally
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, the new cafe is established in the corner
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besides
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beside
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the entrance.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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