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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many professionals say that
cyclists
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 should learn and go through the basic exam before cycling on community
roads
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. I totally agree with
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 statement and
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 essay will explain my opinion with examples.
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,
health
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 and environmental benefits of cycling contribute to society choosing bicycles as transport.
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, the number of
cyclists
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 on public
roads
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 increases every year.
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, in a traffic jam a new bicycle rider meets with an accident and gets injured on the road. A good solution for
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 issue will be the preparation of basic
instruction
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instructions
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 for
cyclists
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.
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, in
Singapore
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Singapore,
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 new
cyclists
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 can use the mobile app, where to learn about cycling on public
roads
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.
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, they can pass the basic exam in the app before being allowed on general
roads
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 and to feel confident by themself.
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, the government should adopt a law of cycling on public
roads
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. It helps to control stoppage and for the safety of others.
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, in New York
cyclists
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 should follow the highway signal and move like other vehicles on public
roads
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.
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, they should have all staff for safety like helmets, break signals and lights for cycling at night time.
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, in one of the megapolis cities in the world quantity of cycling accidents on the street is minimal.
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, transport rules learning and examination should be required for bicycle riders. I agree with experts and think that introducing rules to go through to examine before cycling in public areas helps to decrease road traffic and accidents.

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examples
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introduction conclusion
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